by Hey there, Ami here. I'll be grading your app today. Edits are in this color. Now before I get started, may I request you check the grammar in this magic? Otherwise let's go!
Bump when edits have been made~Epitaphless wrote:
Magic Name Here: Lightning God Slayer Magic
Element Here: Lightning
Primary/Secondary: Primary
Character Specific/Non-Character Specific This magic is character specific as it is taught to the user by the god of lightning itself.
Offensive/Defensive/Supportive/Mixed: OffensiveLightning God Slayer magic is lightning magic taught to the user by the god of lightning itself. With this magic, the user can consume other lightning spells in order to gain more stamina and power, though can't consume lightning dragon slayer or lightning devil slayer magic. I'm going to require a few more sentences of description, also you're a god slayer so you can consume dragon slayer magic only.
none because none are allowed right now fam.
-Don't you metal with me! : This magic is strong to metal magic.
-Quick to Cast. : This magic can be casted very quickly. Just to be sure, your spells are no faster than any other spells when it comes to spell speed
-Bring the gods down! : This magic can slay gods. This magic isn't a strength but rather an aspect of this magic, may you please choose a different strength?
Who needs defense? : This magic is all offense all the time.
-What's Range? : The maximum effective range of this magic (without a conductor) is 2/3s max range for that spell rank.
-It'll never be a breeze. : This magic is weak to wind magic.
-Don't even talk about predictable.: This magic, being black lightning and all, is EXTREMELY easy to notice.
- D-Rank:
- Lightning God's Fist:
Name: Lightning God's Fist
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Range: Arms length at a maximum.
Appearance: This spell's appearance is black lightning dancing from the user's upper arm and down to their fist circling it rapidly.
Description: This spell increases the strength of the user's punch adding lightning damage. How much damage does the opponent take? Also how fast does this spell travel? How much mana does this cost? What is the duration and cooldown?
- Lightning God's Charge:
Name: Lightning God's Charge
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Range: 5m
Appearance: The spell appears as black lightning wrapping itself all around the user and pulsating.
Description: This is a spell that allows the user to knock someone back ten meters upon contact. It does not take a running charge. A quick shoulder is more than enough to create the knock back effect. This spell will hold for a maximum of a 5 meter charge. Going to need damage amout, speed, mana cost, duration and cooldown.
- Lightning God's Rage:
Name: Lightning God's Rage
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Range: 10M
Appearance: This spell is a black ball of lightning that has a two foot diameter. It is launched as a projectile.
Description: On contact, this spell discharges in order to deal lightning damage to an enemy. Same as above. Going to need you to actually explain what it does. Same as above means nothing to me. And as always going to need damage, speed, mana cost, cooldown and duration.
- C-Rank:
- B-Rank:
- A-Rank:
- S-Rank:
- L-Rank:
- X-Rank:
- Z-Rank:
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